A Climbers Haiku

[NickfromWI]

last nights rain fell hard
slippery black oak I climbed
enjoyed long limb walk


orrrr..

vines under my tree
tangle my throwline in knots
hour to set line

 

[MasterBlaster]

Groundies drive me nuts
Someday I'm gonna kill one
But, so far, not yet!

:angel:




Spacemule, what deviation is the 4, 6, 4? How many more are there?

 

[John Paul Sanborn]

All you wanted to know and more.

http://www.dogpile.com/info.dogpl/search/web/haiku

My understanding is that english is too difficult to stick with 5,7,5 and make it work well.

I stick with the ideology that it should be a short 3 line poem, nonryming and be a "verbal snapshot" from which the reader can see what happened.

the green frog lept
into the still blue pond
making ripples of gray

being evocotive of nature seems to be a must too.

Chunking blocks down
saw moves in the curf
spewing dust down formans neck

 

[OutOnaLimb]

Hows this?


Russian olives suck
they seem to try and hurt me
thorns that poke my eyes

 

[murphy4trees]

Wind blowing through woods
Telling an ancient secret
There is only GOD

 

[TREETX]

It sounds like glorified Japanese Iambic Pentameter.


Or at least it seems iambic pentameter is an integral part of haiku

.02

 

[jmchristopher]

Vertical masters
Climb out on a limb of words
Break a poem's line

 

[Bradley Ford]

ArboristSite rocks!
Learning to climb and prune trees
From experts and nuts!

 

[rb_in_va]

Such a view from tree
Is that my house over there?
Why doth mailman pierce?

 

[John Paul Sanborn]

Originally posted by TREETX
It sounds like glorified Japanese Iambic Pentameter.


Or at least it seems iambic pentameter is an integral part of haiku

.02

All verse has a meter, one of the precepts of poetry is theat is is learned and shows a higher social elevation of the user. And our minds love patterns.

Iambic Pentameter uses 5 sets of 2 ylybles with a soft HARD rythym

Thake this from Marlowe's Dr. Faustus
"Oh, GENtle FaustUS, leave THIS ????èd ART!"

The intent is to have it flow from the actor

this form is ment more to be heard then to be read.

Haiku deals more with the brevity of the poem then with the meter. It has the same effect as a good joke or riddle by giving the reader a flash of insite.

I could not see myself sitting through a Haiku recitle, but I do like Shakespear Marlowe and the like.

On the flip side, I don't like reading those works because I'm not trained in it and it does not come out right.

 

[BigJohn]

I remember writeing haiku's in 6th grade. Mine was a little sexually offensive. I got a week of suspension. I haven't taken up the pen since. I can only remember the first two lines.

 

[rb_in_va]

O great diseased tree
Terrible crack when crotch splits
Hope tied solid stem

 

[murphy4trees]

Not really tree related but a goodie...

Dogs love faithfully
be their masters kind or cruel
I Am not a dog

by Sandy Taylor

 

[MasterBlaster]

Allways the last cut
I run out of gasoline
Gosh-darn I hate that!

 

[OutOnaLimb]

Thanks for clearing up that imabic pentameter thing for me JPS. I am to tired to try and explain it.
:Monkey:

 

[MasterBlaster]

Rescueman needs help
Where are the powers that be?
Perhaps not aware???

 

[Old Monkey]

Old worn thread dangles
Fine dust settles on the loom
Masters bench is empty

 

[TimberMcPherson]

Ugly pine towers
Over me like an ogre
meet mr 066.

Pine dashed across ground
limbs scattered in broken shards
weeping for itself

 

[xander9727]

The stump grinder starts
The metal cutters are sharp
Chips begin to fly

 

[xander9727]

The children cry out
The Master has left his home
The family hurts