MasterBlaster
TreeHouse Elder
The Oak crys for me
It calls for my expertise
I respond with care
Whos up next?
It calls for my expertise
I respond with care
Whos up next?
A Climbers Haiku
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Stumper
One Man Band
I've never tried Haiku. I'm not even sure about the rules that define it.
An apple spreads its branches
Invading sacred space
I shape its life.
Does that make the grade?
An apple spreads its branches
Invading sacred space
I shape its life.
Does that make the grade?
MasterBlaster
TreeHouse Elder
Close.
The rules are pretty simple.
Syllables.
First line- 5, 2nd line - 7, 3rd line 5.
5, 7, 5.
Where yas bean?
The rules are pretty simple.
Syllables.
First line- 5, 2nd line - 7, 3rd line 5.
5, 7, 5.
Where yas bean?
MasterBlaster
TreeHouse Elder
The tauntline has worked
Everyone says that its wrong
Have I somehow failed?
Everyone says that its wrong
Have I somehow failed?
Stumper
One Man Band
Ahh.....
I was hunting last week then had a death in the family so did a quick return and turn around and went to the funeral. 2500 miles. 1 deer. 1 blizzard. 1 funeral.
I was hunting last week then had a death in the family so did a quick return and turn around and went to the funeral. 2500 miles. 1 deer. 1 blizzard. 1 funeral.
Stumper
One Man Band
Apple spreads its branches
Invading a sacred space
I shape it for life.
Invading a sacred space
I shape it for life.
MasterBlaster
TreeHouse Elder
Originally posted by Stumper
Apple spreads its branches
Invading a sacred space
I shape it for life.
Almost!
Your first line was over by one.
Scars2prove-it
ArboristSite Operative
Doesn't this have 8?
Stumper
One Man Band
Too many miles. Too little sleep. I would still expect to successfully count syllables!Butch asks for haiku
I fumble repeatedly
Virtuous patience.
Apple spreads branches
Invading a sacred space
I shape it for life
MasterBlaster
TreeHouse Elder
Nope! Seven.
Stumper
One Man Band
Err.. Butch, I think that you would need to write it "Ev'ryone says that its wrong." (or "Everyone says its wrong"). Everyone is 4 syllables when it is enunciated fully so Scars is correct.
MasterBlaster
TreeHouse Elder
Yup! Yur right!
I was out of my mind from eggnog!
I was out of my mind from eggnog!
NickfromWI
Addicted to ArboristSite
In honor of Butch the MasterBlaster...
Present-day dino,
sticks to his trusty tautline.
Will he see the light?
love
nick
Present-day dino,
sticks to his trusty tautline.
Will he see the light?
love
nick
Koa Man
Kahuna giganticus
I get paid for job
I wait patiently for hours
Oh bank closed today.
I wait patiently for hours
Oh bank closed today.
MasterBlaster
TreeHouse Elder
Originally posted by Sylvatica
My haiku is poor
The Japanese are appalled
But, it's my first one!
Your Haiku was grand!
It could have had more insight
But, it's your first one.
blue
ArboristSite Operative
what the f&%$ ?
John Paul Sanborn
Above average climber
Meesh-El has a number of mine on her website. I lost most of them when my computer hiccuped.
the sylabic rythum need not be so exact, and there are other combinations that are acceptable.
the real idea is to pass an image on to the reader
water running down limbs
thunder boombs
the smell of burning rope
boughs move under foot
wind rustles leaves
I am content
another concept is to get a point across as minimalisticly as possible
two cycle smoke in the air
a tree dies
my family is feed
the sylabic rythum need not be so exact, and there are other combinations that are acceptable.
the real idea is to pass an image on to the reader
water running down limbs
thunder boombs
the smell of burning rope
boughs move under foot
wind rustles leaves
I am content
another concept is to get a point across as minimalisticly as possible
two cycle smoke in the air
a tree dies
my family is feed
MasterBlaster
TreeHouse Elder
Hey! This is hardcore! 5 -7 - 5 !
spacemule
The Peanut Gallery
Traditional Japanese was 5-7-5. Modern haiku deviates from this.
The large, shiny nail,
That the roofing hammer struck,
Was my purple thumb.
The cool evening
Stars shine with the soft lights
Of fireflies.
The large, shiny nail,
That the roofing hammer struck,
Was my purple thumb.
The cool evening
Stars shine with the soft lights
Of fireflies.
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